28 Days of Unreason
Today’s Jim Harrison line is from his poem ‘Return’.
“Spring day, too loud for talk
when bones tire of their flesh
and want something better.”
~Harrison
THE SWIM
I hear the constant drip of rain
It doesn’t seem to change
-like the monotone conversations
we now seem to haveI ceased to notice my brainwaves
-long ago flat-lined into dank boredom
Mundane this…. mundane that
Didn’t we used to dance once?I watch the rain form a river between us
Neither of us notices… or even cares
Only when river becomes ocean
do we start to paddleEach, now with renewed vigour
-powering each stroke with hope
as we swim away from each other
-only looking back once
at the specks we’ve now become
©Vivian Zems
Day 1 – 28 Days of Unreason
Each day in June. Jilly will post a poem from the poet, Jim Harrison, to jump-start our writing. The theme is called Days of Unreason because she pulled these partiular lines from his book Songs of Unreason. This year, Jilly will use quotes from other Harrison poems, as well.
June 2, 2018 at 4:22 pm
Oh, the ache that this poem creates! So wonderfully done. I am glad you’ve joined in with 28 Days 🙂
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June 2, 2018 at 4:24 pm
Thanks Jilly……you made it irresistable 🙂
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June 2, 2018 at 5:09 pm
“I can resist anything except temptation” Oscar Wilde. (Resist not!)
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June 2, 2018 at 8:53 pm
🙂 🙂
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June 2, 2018 at 5:35 pm
this is simply amazing post and very creative lines – I just like your Facebook Page, could you please like my Social Facebook Page, here is the link:
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Thank you!!
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June 2, 2018 at 8:35 pm
Thanks Mihran. I’ll be happy to.
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June 2, 2018 at 6:09 pm
When I read ”
Only when river becomes ocean
do we start to paddle
Each, now with renewed vigour”
I filled with hope thinking okay this poem might end happy yesss….until I realized they were swimming away from each other and crushed my hopes and dreams. This was a perfect “Psych you thought” moment for me. I enjoy your skills. Well played.
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June 2, 2018 at 8:34 pm
Thanks Ana….there was no hope for these two; they’d given up already
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June 2, 2018 at 6:14 pm
This is incredibly evocative. Especially like; “I watch the rain form a river between us. Neither of us notices… or even cares. Only when river becomes ocean do we start to paddle.” Thank you so much for participating 🙂
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June 2, 2018 at 8:33 pm
Thanks Sanaa! Better late than never *wink*
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June 6, 2018 at 3:59 am
Wow – this is stellar – the monotone and “didn’t we used to dance” etc ending in “specs”. The use of water throughout really worked well!
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June 6, 2018 at 6:37 pm
Thank you! Welcome back 😃 where’ve you been?
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