This is a poem about an unborn poem. It’s been rattling around in my soul for over a week now. I know it’s about faith in place of fear and it involves the Red Sea.
( I’m currently reading the book of Exodus…. so I know that’s why). But I can’t quite ‘see’ the rest of the poem. Soon…. very soon🙏🏽
There’s a poem percolating
within my subconscious
It’s bubbling and reaching for sight from behind my eyes
with its feet planted on my understanding
I know the first line
but play musical chairs with the other
five
I feel the concept of these unformed
words
but I’m left to guess the tone of these hidden emotions
They are born of tears and a thudding heart
But are they excitement, grief or joy?
I can’t tell….they all sound the same
© Vivian Zems
Dverse Poets Pub #OLN-hosted by Linda Lyberg
November 12, 2020 at 11:48 pm
Absolutely beautiful!
check this out https://littlethings001.wordpress.com/2020/11/09/lately/
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November 19, 2020 at 10:41 pm
Cheers!
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November 12, 2020 at 11:48 pm
I relate to this. Sometimes I have nothing but a first or last line but need to wait a few days for the rest.
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November 13, 2020 at 2:34 am
Ah! I guess this is what ‘musing’ is!
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November 12, 2020 at 11:57 pm
Ooh a deep mystery. Can’t wait to see and feel it once committed to the page! Being connected to Exodus makes it all the more intriguing.
Gorgeous image also!!!
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November 13, 2020 at 2:35 am
Thanks Jade! I’m intrigued as well!
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November 13, 2020 at 9:21 pm
You’re welcome.
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November 13, 2020 at 12:00 am
keep going Vivan, it will come out if you let it.
this is good too.
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November 13, 2020 at 2:35 am
Thank you…I appreciate you stopping by 🙂
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November 13, 2020 at 4:28 am
Vivian
I love this poem about the process of a poem coming to life inside of you. I relate and you have shared it beautifully. I am wondering about including this as part of a three-part poem, part of which is the poem to come. Thanks for sharing.
Take care.
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November 19, 2020 at 10:40 pm
Thanks Ali…and what a great idea. I believe I’ll do so….especially as I’m still pregnant with this poem!
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November 13, 2020 at 9:25 am
wow, this is such deep words and poem. It speaks very loud about a life circle and inside of you. I deeply appreciate of you sharing this words and poem
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November 19, 2020 at 10:40 pm
Thanks Mihran! I appreciate your kind words 🙂
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November 13, 2020 at 9:37 am
A familiar feeling beautifully explored, Viv! I especially love:
‘I know the first line
but play musical chairs with the other
five’.
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November 19, 2020 at 10:40 pm
Thanks Kim!
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November 13, 2020 at 10:16 am
I can’t tell….they all sound the same
They will unless and until the first sentence of the draft is visible right before one’s eyes. The first step forward seems to be unsurmountable in the beginning! Very familiar common obstacle Vivian!
Hank
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November 19, 2020 at 10:36 pm
Indeed, Hank! thanks for dropping by!
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November 13, 2020 at 2:04 pm
Oh yes, that exactly the feeling I get when I’m writing. The ideas rolling around, some just out of reach, some almost formed, disparate waves breaking together on a rocky shore until eventually they coalesce.
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November 19, 2020 at 10:35 pm
A perfect description, Chris!
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November 13, 2020 at 4:23 pm
Vivian- a wonderful contemplation. And yes, there are times words are so elusive. Beautiful!
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November 19, 2020 at 10:34 pm
Thanks Linda!
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November 13, 2020 at 7:22 pm
A universal malaise I think, for many of us ~~ but few have the ability to describe it as well as you!!
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November 19, 2020 at 10:34 pm
Awww…thanks Helen 🙂
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November 14, 2020 at 1:13 am
within my subconscious…. I understand… sometimes, I have such an overpowering feeling, or emotion but just can’t put words and meaning behind it. It can be so frustrating.
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November 19, 2020 at 10:33 pm
Indeed! Thanks for dropping by 🙂
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November 14, 2020 at 9:22 am
I can identify with your poem, Viv. For me 2020 feels like it has been a poem about poems. A somewhat discouraging feeling, at times.
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November 19, 2020 at 10:33 pm
This year has sure been an eye-opener!
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November 14, 2020 at 11:23 am
I know this.
Anna :o]
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November 19, 2020 at 10:33 pm
Ah!
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November 15, 2020 at 4:40 pm
This is absolutely gorgeous in its entirety, Viv! 💝 I love; “It’s bubbling and reaching for sight from behind my eyes with its feet planted on my understanding.” 😀
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November 19, 2020 at 11:27 pm
Thanks Sanaa!
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November 16, 2020 at 6:38 pm
I think we’ve all experienced this. 😀
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November 19, 2020 at 11:27 pm
Absolutely!
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November 20, 2020 at 10:56 am
I can already guess that the poem will be wonderful as it speaks of faith in place of fear. The world could do with a lot more of faith and less of fear.
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February 3, 2021 at 12:17 am
Thank you 🙂
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November 20, 2020 at 10:58 am
I can already guess that the poem will be wonderful as it speaks of faith in place of fear. The world could do with a lot more of faith and less of fear.
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December 12, 2020 at 4:16 pm
A lovely poem about a poem
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December 12, 2020 at 4:17 pm
Thank you 😊
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December 27, 2020 at 3:45 am
True, we all have that poetic morsel stuck in our mouth, but when out it’s a relief. Nice
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February 24, 2021 at 8:38 pm
Somehow we lost connection. Nice to have found you again!
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April 19, 2021 at 2:56 am
Hi Walt! Good to see you again 🙂 I’ve been on a short break…but hoping to return :). Hope you’re keeping well?
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April 21, 2021 at 2:52 pm
It’s been a hard couple of years health wise, but I’m doing ok I think. I have surgery next Wednesday to repair an abdominal hernia. This too shall pass. 😊
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June 13, 2021 at 10:39 pm
Hi Walt, sorry for the delay in replying. I hope the surgery went well🙏🏽
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June 13, 2021 at 10:21 pm
Very well written poem about a poem
This is beautiful
Love this
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December 20, 2021 at 10:32 pm
Thank you 🙏🏽
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