It’s 5 AM and the streets are quiet.
I park my car by a corner-shop and pause to search for change.
Passing me, in a crab-like walk, is a man.
His head bobs and lolls as he shuffles down the street.
Drunk this early?
Or drunk from the night before?
I can’t tell.
But there is something poetic about his walk.
It echoes groans from a dark world
-a world of despair, dismay and loss
-where many sorrows are drowned repeatedly.
I watch him weave along the sidewalk
-oblivious to the gentle wind.
I find my coins and hurry in to buy some water.
As I drive off to work, I watch him in the rearview mirror.
He leaves patterns in his wake across the street.
© Vivian Zems
Poets United #496
#NarrativePoetry
October 13, 2019 at 1:26 pm
Keenly observed and deftly relayed, Vivian!
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October 15, 2019 at 9:50 pm
Thanks Ron!
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October 13, 2019 at 1:33 pm
Ha, i can see him, wobbling along. Groans from a dark world of loss. Yes, that is usually the case.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:50 pm
Indeed!
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October 13, 2019 at 1:34 pm
Really kind of a sad poem, Vivvan. What a hard life this man has undoubtedly had. The observer can watch him from afar and wonder, but to live such a life must be so sad. I liked the details you included. I can see him through your eyes.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:50 pm
Thanks Mary!
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October 13, 2019 at 2:11 pm
What a great character portrait – and brilliant ending
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October 15, 2019 at 9:49 pm
Thank you 😊
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October 13, 2019 at 5:54 pm
What an observer the poet is, finding music and dance and poetry even in the ungainly lurch of someone affected by too much alcohol.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:49 pm
Thank you 🙏🏽
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October 13, 2019 at 6:21 pm
I never thought of it this way. But you are right. Drunkenness does look as a tragic poem, one that stumbles and sticks on its way to breaking lives.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:49 pm
Tragic is the right word.
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October 13, 2019 at 6:38 pm
Oh, wow. The idea of schools of regrets, etc. leaving a wake to be stumbled through is an amazing image. And empathetic.
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October 13, 2019 at 7:03 pm
This is so evocative! I especially resonate with; “But there is something poetic about his walk. It echoes groans from a dark world -a world of despair, dismay and loss -where many sorrows are drowned repeatedly.” ❤️
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October 15, 2019 at 9:48 pm
Thanks Sanaa!
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October 13, 2019 at 8:59 pm
I think I’ve seen this man before. I also think I’ve been this man with the “groans from a dark world.”
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October 13, 2019 at 9:14 pm
Lol!
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October 13, 2019 at 11:16 pm
A poignant scene, eloquently sketched in words.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:48 pm
Thanks Wendy!
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October 14, 2019 at 2:03 am
What a great piece of observation of a lost life Vivian. Living close to a big city it is quite common to meet his (or her) like nearly at the end of all hope.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:48 pm
It’s all too common. Thank you 😊
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October 14, 2019 at 2:44 am
A poetic character sketch of real life. It’s sad to see one weave his/her way through the darker streets of life.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:47 pm
Sad, indeed
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October 14, 2019 at 5:38 am
Yeah, one can only wonder at what darkness passes through him and wish him light.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:46 pm
Absolutely!
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October 14, 2019 at 12:33 pm
Vividly portrayed, and moving. But perhaps he is not drunk but suffering from some kind of illness, e.g. Parkinson’s, motor neurone disease, osteo-arthritis….
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October 15, 2019 at 9:46 pm
Perhaps😊
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October 14, 2019 at 6:43 pm
Excellent narrative Vivian. I could picture him so well.
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October 15, 2019 at 9:45 pm
Thank you Linda!
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March 11, 2020 at 2:09 pm
Sounds like Watson wrote it
🕰️🧤🖋️
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March 11, 2020 at 6:36 pm
Im honoured 😊😊🙏🏽🙏🏽
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