The muffled crying was making it difficult for Count Vasti to focus.
“Will you keep that down!”he growled at the source of the irritating sound. He glared at the girl tied to a makeshift gurney in the centre of the room.
Her face was puce with fear and anguish, eyes bulging as he advanced.
Count Vasti was doubly irritated because there wasn’t any….. what’s the word?…Ah, yes, that’s it! Atmosphere.
The room needed something else to add to his motivation. He sighed, disgruntled.
Walking briskly back to his work station, the Count surveyed his saws. He was looking for that perfect bladed edge. Too jagged, and his work would be ruined.
Her cries were now strangled screams. He didn’t care. No one would hear her so high up in these mountains. Besides, he’d created his lab in the castle basement to ensure total solitude.
A faint rumbling caught his ears. Oh, it couldn’t be, could it?
The thunderclap that followed was perfect music to his ears. Lightening flashed across the candle-lit room, making all the shadows jump to life.
Another scream, followed by rapid shallow breathing.
Galvanised now, Count Vasti found the saw he needed and picked it up gently . He caressed the blade lovingly – basking in the orchestra of thunder, rain and terror.
Atmosphere!
As though in a trance, he glided back towards the Gurney. The girl was no longer a girl to him-she was a masterpiece waiting to be revealed.
His finest art.
©Vivian Zems
Poets United– Telling Tales with Magaly Guerrero: a Pantry of Prose, #7 ~ Gothic Fiction
September 1, 2019 at 4:39 pm
Some artist get very creative about their materials, don’t they?
I really like the dance between humor and horror. And the fact that the Count–that artistic rogue–gets his storm atmosphere.
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September 1, 2019 at 5:49 pm
Thanks Magaly!
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September 1, 2019 at 4:44 pm
Oh this is so creepy… you do not really monsters, humans are perfectly capable of being even worse I think. The way he searches for the perfect blade and how I imagine how he had seduced the poor girl with a candlelit dinner before she fell asleep and woke up on the gurney… some of the crime novels I have read are almost like Gothic novels.
One in particular I remember that resembles this is Wire in the blood by Val McDermid
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September 2, 2019 at 9:12 am
Thanks Bjorn!
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September 1, 2019 at 5:48 pm
Oh my goodness, this is goth to the max. So well done. I could see her bulging eyes.
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September 1, 2019 at 5:49 pm
Thanks Sherry!
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September 1, 2019 at 8:03 pm
I love your take on Frankenstein, Viv! You’ve certainly given us atmosphere in this story!
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September 2, 2019 at 9:10 am
Thanks Kim! 🙂
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September 1, 2019 at 9:13 pm
That’s artists for you. They need their muses to be wooed in just the right way before they can begin the process of (un) creation. Really macabre atmosphere you created!
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September 2, 2019 at 9:09 am
We all need some atmosphere…no matter the art. Lol!- Thanks Rommy!
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September 1, 2019 at 10:30 pm
A Dr. Frankenstein in reverse, taking apart instead of joining together to form his own masterpiece. How delightfully dark.
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September 2, 2019 at 9:09 am
Lol! Thanks Lori!
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September 2, 2019 at 2:17 am
This felt like an episode of “Criminal Minds” creepy and the added storm leaves one cringing.
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September 2, 2019 at 7:01 am
Loved that it creeped you out!😆
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September 2, 2019 at 10:17 am
I love how this builds to its chilling ending. Superb story
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September 2, 2019 at 4:36 pm
Thank you 😊
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September 2, 2019 at 12:31 pm
I am reading this just before bedtime; no I am bound to have nightmares! You certainly got your teeth into this story didn’t you!
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September 2, 2019 at 4:36 pm
Lol! I did! Thank you 😊
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September 2, 2019 at 1:03 pm
Ooh! That’s the creepiest of the lot!
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September 2, 2019 at 4:36 pm
Lol! Thank you 🙏🏾
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September 2, 2019 at 3:54 pm
Oh Vivian this story is a masterpiece! Wonderfully crafted! Took me there and held me captive, waiting to see what was going to happen. Brilliant!!!
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September 2, 2019 at 4:35 pm
Thank you! Thank you!🙏🏾
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September 2, 2019 at 11:22 pm
Creepy and with perfect spots for little panicked snickers. 🙂
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September 3, 2019 at 9:01 pm
Lol! Thank you 😊
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