“Life is fair”
(they never said)
“A walk in the park!”
(like they never crowed)
“A picnic of strawberries and cream!”
(as though they never crooned)And yet for all its anguish
life is still precious..with….every..ragged…breath.. you.. take
©Vivian Zems
Poets United– Midweek Motif- Picnic
Smell The Coffee 
May 15, 2019 at 12:13 pm
How beautifully you have said it.
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May 16, 2019 at 11:07 am
Thanks Sadje 😊
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May 15, 2019 at 2:45 pm
“And yet for all its anguish
life is still precious”—-It is.
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May 16, 2019 at 11:07 am
😊
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May 15, 2019 at 3:52 pm
So true. My poem went in the same direction. Life is precious indeed, even if it is no picnic.
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May 16, 2019 at 11:07 am
I quite agree 😊
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May 15, 2019 at 7:10 pm
Nice, the way you challenged the ‘life is a picnic ‘ metaphor
Much😊love
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May 16, 2019 at 11:06 am
Thanks Gillena😊
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May 16, 2019 at 12:32 am
life is precious….so enjoy as many picnics as possible…bkm
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May 16, 2019 at 11:05 am
Absolutely!😊
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May 16, 2019 at 2:21 am
It isone thing to fall down but quite another to get up again and start over.and be the new person you were always meant to be.
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May 16, 2019 at 11:05 am
Indeed 😊
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May 16, 2019 at 7:08 am
Aww, precious indeed. So is your poem!
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May 16, 2019 at 11:06 am
Thanks Khaya!
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May 16, 2019 at 2:46 pm
Yes, life is precious!! Each day, each moment.
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May 16, 2019 at 9:19 pm
Good observation: life is still precious in spite of the anguish.
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May 16, 2019 at 9:41 pm
This drew a deep sigh from me! How beautifully you have put it, Vivian! ❤️
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May 16, 2019 at 9:42 pm
Oh yes– love the brightness in this… no anguish here.
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May 16, 2019 at 10:26 pm
Hurrah–to be alive is to inhabit the cognitive dissonance, beauty vs. cruelty, equity vs. dishonesty, and so on ad infinitum.
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May 16, 2019 at 10:52 pm
Life is indeed precious.
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May 20, 2019 at 5:10 am
Absolutely!
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May 16, 2019 at 11:48 pm
Yes! This is life indeed. Well written.
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May 17, 2019 at 12:51 am
Great write Vivian, and the ending couplet is powerful!
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May 20, 2019 at 5:10 am
Thank you 🙏🏾
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May 17, 2019 at 3:12 am
Great reminder that life is very precious! Interesting form.
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May 20, 2019 at 5:09 am
Thanks Dwight!
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May 17, 2019 at 6:42 am
Life’s a package deal, and worth living every bit of it.
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May 20, 2019 at 5:09 am
Absolutely!
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May 17, 2019 at 1:32 pm
This is so beautiful and true; I love the simplicity and the “picnic with strawberries and cream”. Life is indeed precious!
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May 20, 2019 at 5:09 am
Absolutely! Thank you for dropping by 😊
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May 17, 2019 at 5:16 pm
Life isn’t always strawberries and cream, as you have written Unfortunately it can have tough times and bitter tastes. A balance and variety is hoped for!
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May 20, 2019 at 5:08 am
Indeed!! Thank you for dropping by 😊
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May 18, 2019 at 4:15 am
“And yet for all its anguish
life is still precious” ….I agree!
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May 18, 2019 at 1:32 pm
Thank you 😊
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May 18, 2019 at 11:43 pm
Oh this is too good:
“And yet for all its anguish
life is still precious
..with….every..ragged…breath.. you.. take”
The duality of us tends to twist us into knots. I admire your sentiment here.
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May 20, 2019 at 5:07 am
Thanks Barry😊
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