In the beginning
after the world was formed
and mountains took shape
and rivers determined to snake
It was only at that point
with the birth of flesh
did breath become air
and our eyes skywards-stared
©Vivian Zems
#NaPoWriMo 2019- National Poetry Month Challenge [FLESH]
Real Toads- Tuesday Platform
April 9, 2019 at 12:25 pm
Well, I’M waiting until there are coffee bars. 😛
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April 14, 2019 at 11:15 pm
Lol!
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April 9, 2019 at 1:04 pm
How beautifully you wrote this Vivian; it was a delight to read.
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April 14, 2019 at 11:16 pm
Thanks Robin 🙂
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April 9, 2019 at 1:32 pm
Lovely. I love those determined rivers. And now I want to join the rest and look up.
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April 14, 2019 at 11:16 pm
Lol!
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April 9, 2019 at 2:51 pm
Yummy! And profound.
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April 14, 2019 at 11:16 pm
Thanks Rosemary
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April 9, 2019 at 3:04 pm
This is quite dramatic as a creation myth. I like it!
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April 14, 2019 at 11:16 pm
Thanks Kerry 🙂
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April 9, 2019 at 5:15 pm
I love this. My eyes have been skyward all my life.
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April 14, 2019 at 11:17 pm
Amen to that!
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April 9, 2019 at 6:03 pm
Beautifully dramatic! I especially like the lines,
“with the birth of flesh
did breath become air”
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April 9, 2019 at 6:38 pm
This is wonderfully vivid, Vivian! ❤️
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April 14, 2019 at 11:17 pm
Thanks Sanaa!
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April 9, 2019 at 6:44 pm
what a creation myth. Our eyes turned skyward and poof, we were on the moon. Profound.
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April 10, 2019 at 3:40 am
And we just keep looking up
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April 14, 2019 at 11:18 pm
Absolutely!
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April 10, 2019 at 5:34 am
beautiful
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April 14, 2019 at 11:18 pm
Thank you!
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