As I sit by the river bank of pain
I put all my sorrows
in the bags under my eyes
I’ll unpack
when I get home
©Vivian Zems
As I sit by the river bank of pain
I put all my sorrows
in the bags under my eyes
I’ll unpack
when I get home
©Vivian Zems
December 18, 2018 at 8:34 pm
Sitting by the river is a good spot for mourning. I love the idea of the sorrows in the bags under your eyes, and unpacking when you get home. Very clever.
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December 19, 2018 at 10:19 pm
Thanks Sherry!
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December 18, 2018 at 8:37 pm
Aww, this is so sad … but such smart writing!
This reminds me why I love micro poetry so much.
Excellent.
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December 18, 2018 at 10:06 pm
Thank you! I was inspired by Rupi Kaur 😊
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December 18, 2018 at 10:47 pm
So much insight in very words. Loved this, Vivian.
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December 19, 2018 at 10:18 pm
Thank you 😊
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December 19, 2018 at 1:39 am
Very deep.
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December 19, 2018 at 10:18 pm
Thank you 😊
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December 20, 2018 at 3:01 am
Welcome
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December 19, 2018 at 1:39 am
Interesting play on ‘bags’!!!!
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December 19, 2018 at 10:18 pm
Thanks Rajani. ( Lost my aunt last week)
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December 20, 2018 at 2:24 am
Sorry for your loss Vivian. More strength to you and your family from across the miles.
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December 20, 2018 at 10:11 am
Thank you 🙏🏾
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December 19, 2018 at 2:25 am
Loved this. ..especially unpacking the bags under your eyes. That time of year for a lot of us.:) Merry Christmas !
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December 19, 2018 at 10:17 pm
Indeed it is. ( Lost my aunt last week)
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December 19, 2018 at 3:19 am
This is lovely with an almost zen-like quality of worldly pain receding or getting stored away when close to nature. That “I’ll unpack when I get home” is quite witty.
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December 19, 2018 at 9:54 pm
Thanks Anmol!
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December 19, 2018 at 7:25 am
Really good thinking!
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December 19, 2018 at 9:54 pm
Thanks Kerry!
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December 19, 2018 at 2:27 pm
Nice twist on bags. Makes me think about where I put my sorrow.
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December 19, 2018 at 9:54 pm
Lol! Thanks
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December 20, 2018 at 4:33 am
Your words have so much depth! Each line is so apt and filled with emotions…That you have put sorrows in bags under your eyes and will unpack when you get home really touched me… I guess I would do the same
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December 20, 2018 at 10:11 am
Thank you Kislaya!
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December 21, 2018 at 2:57 am
kaykuala
I put all my sorrows
in the bags under my eyes
Great way of expressing it, Vivian! Eye bags as something of a container!
Hank
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December 21, 2018 at 12:25 pm
Thanks Hank!
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