Preamble: So often, I dive into a poem-headlong-having worked out the meaning and the kinks in my head. It’s occurred to me that my non-poetic friends might find a preamble useful; giving the poetry some context.
In this piece, I’ve employed repetition in a lament of why justice (given the female gender) should be so elusive sometimes. I’ve played the desperate pleas against an “all-too-cool” justice. Make of this what you will !
…and even if we woke the souls of our dead
would justice stop playing hard to get?
even if we tugged at heaven instead
…and even if we woke the souls of our dead
Swallowing hot tears and tempering down the dread
would I see more of her than her silhouette?
…and even if we woke the souls of our dead
would justice stop playing hard to get?
©Vivian Zems
dVerse Poets– MTB- Repetition (#triolet)
October 25, 2018 at 11:05 pm
The repetition is used so effectively, Vivian! Asking the rhetorical question and leaving us with much to consider; nice!
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October 26, 2018 at 1:46 am
This hits deep, Vivian. Justice for women is so far out of reach. Bless you!
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October 26, 2018 at 2:14 am
I like your refrain of questions Vivian. And yes, justice for those voices forever silenced.
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October 26, 2018 at 8:48 am
I think repetition works so well in a case like this where that question keeps repeating itself…
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October 26, 2018 at 9:11 am
I agree with Bjorn – the question will keep repeating itself as long as the law is mainly in men’s hands.
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October 26, 2018 at 2:26 pm
each time the question is asked it lends deeper meaning as the line before emphasises and accentuates the problems faced
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October 26, 2018 at 5:24 pm
Very powerful message. Thanks for sharing
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October 26, 2018 at 5:40 pm
Nice line: “would I see more of her than her silhouette?”
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October 28, 2018 at 12:18 am
Iconic and brilliant! The repetition makes it so effective! I could hear Sojourner Truth in your verse!
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October 28, 2018 at 6:44 pm
Thanks for saying that Frank. I had no idea about Sojourner Truth until you mentioned her. I’m off to get a book about her.
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