What if
I helped you build your dreams
dusting and feathering them
into shape
What if
I painted your destiny
in Caribbean blue with white doves of peace
and then…..
What if
I took a scalpel to this tapestry
slicing it- but ever so slowly
while I drank in the pain
leaking from your heart
and seeping from your face
What if
I couldn’t help that I needed
this control
this power
and couldn’t stop until you were Nothing
What if
we changed positions
What if…..
for a season
I become…. just like you?
©Vivian Zems
September 2, 2018 at 11:35 am
This is deep and this is so wonderfully penned down ….Only a well experienced soul can write this down….And this was really beautiful …I totally get the essence of it …
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September 2, 2018 at 11:37 am
Thank you 🙏🏾. I believe it to be one of the stories that come out of abusive relationships
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September 2, 2018 at 11:39 am
I got that dear Vivian …Plz take care ….
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September 2, 2018 at 6:59 pm
🙂
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September 2, 2018 at 11:48 am
I love the questions you raise..really sets us thinking
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September 2, 2018 at 7:00 pm
Thank you!
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September 2, 2018 at 1:06 pm
Wow, what a powerful poem here. I do wonder what it would be like to change places with another & become just LIKE them. I wonder how the abuser would feel THEN!
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September 2, 2018 at 6:59 pm
Indeed! Thanks, Mary!
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September 2, 2018 at 1:52 pm
Ooh – chilling!
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September 2, 2018 at 6:58 pm
🙂
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September 2, 2018 at 5:00 pm
Alas… i think there are those who can inflict pain, and those who cannot do it… it will never be an even balance.
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September 2, 2018 at 6:59 pm
Never, indeed!
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September 2, 2018 at 5:28 pm
Wow! This is so powerful, line by line, culminating with such a punch in its closing lines. Well done!
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September 2, 2018 at 6:56 pm
🙂
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September 2, 2018 at 6:56 pm
thank you!
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September 2, 2018 at 5:51 pm
This is incredibly raw and emotive. I fear for the souls who are victims of an abusive relationship 😥
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September 2, 2018 at 6:56 pm
Absolutely, Sanaa!
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September 2, 2018 at 6:14 pm
Now this does sound very sad!! Vivian thanks for coming by my blog, and for your comment.
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September 2, 2018 at 6:57 pm
Thanks Annell… and my pleasure!
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September 2, 2018 at 7:27 pm
Wow this is dark and chilling.
Happy you dropped by my Sunday Standard today Vivian
Much🍾💛love
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September 2, 2018 at 8:33 pm
Thank you Gillena ❤️
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September 2, 2018 at 8:17 pm
searingly sensational – it reads so well
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September 2, 2018 at 8:29 pm
Thank you Laura 😊
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September 2, 2018 at 10:50 pm
A brilliant articulation. You have taken a subject – that is anything but straightforward (in that abusers were often abused themselves) – and given it a powerful and impactful voice. An important piece.
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September 3, 2018 at 12:37 am
Thank you 🙂 !
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September 2, 2018 at 10:57 pm
Incredible piece of writing this is. The abuser wanting to be in control and to slice the beautiful tapestry. This is powerful Vivian. So effectively written.
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September 3, 2018 at 12:37 am
Thank you!
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September 3, 2018 at 1:53 am
Well that has told him but sadly so many men are blind and brainless even though they may have been abused themselves. One would think they would find a desert island with someone that loved them to obliterate the past.
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September 4, 2018 at 6:21 pm
Great insight😊
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September 3, 2018 at 9:13 am
A powerful poem, Viv, that really strikes a chord with me. You’ve turned the ‘What if…?’ around in this tale of an abusive relationship.
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September 4, 2018 at 6:20 pm
Thanks Kim 😊
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September 3, 2018 at 11:07 am
Well you would never want to swap places with that. Give thanks that you rid yourself of that pestilence and pray that it never darkens your door step again.
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September 4, 2018 at 6:20 pm
Amen 🙏🏾
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September 3, 2018 at 3:34 pm
Oh damn, this is so effective in how it tackles the powerplay wielded by such toxic people.
Powerful and emotive in equal measures.
-HA
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September 4, 2018 at 6:19 pm
Thank you Anmol!
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September 11, 2018 at 7:32 pm
Ooohhh. Could be a novel, and somebody might well say it was based on the story of some real family the author never knew!
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September 12, 2018 at 9:02 am
Thanks Priscilla 🙂
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