Life smirks with a cruel twist of crimson lips
she smiles sometimes but keeps secret her tips
every so often she gives you a kick
and loves to dare you to lay down your chips
How can it be that when I look at her
she shows me nothing but a hazy blur
How can it be when I gaze in her face
she shrugs and threatens to just disappear?
I don’t trust life, so write my own story
If you ask, I’ll say all’s hunky dory
I’ll fight until I can’t fight anymore
and only go down in blazing glory
©Vivian Zems (#Rubaiyat)
Linked to dVerse Meeting the Bar. Frank is hosting today.
The challenge is to write a rubaiyat or some variation on that form. This is in iambic pentameter, four lines and rhyming AABA.
April 26, 2018 at 10:01 pm
Nice rubaiyat! I like the courage of going down only in blazing glory.
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April 26, 2018 at 10:04 pm
Thanks Frank…a lovely challenge!
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April 27, 2018 at 12:38 am
I can see you are not going gentle into that dark night! Very nice work!
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April 27, 2018 at 6:00 am
Thanks, Dwight!
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April 27, 2018 at 2:31 am
That’s three great rubaiyats. The second sounds to me like a mother/daughter conflict
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April 27, 2018 at 6:02 am
They’re meant to be connected..with ‘she’ being life. I love it though when it’s interpreted differently. Thank you!
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April 27, 2018 at 1:19 pm
Thank you!
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April 27, 2018 at 5:17 am
Oh I wanted to echo Dwight’s comment – rage rage against the night
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April 27, 2018 at 6:03 am
Might as well! 🙂 🙂
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April 27, 2018 at 1:09 pm
Life does seem to smirk at us some time, and you’ve captured it well in your rubaiyat, Viv! Well done for producing more than one rubia!
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April 27, 2018 at 1:32 pm
*preening*…LOL! Thanks, Kim!
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April 27, 2018 at 8:55 pm
I absolutely love the personification of life in the very first line…smirking with crimson lips. It really sets up all the stanzas….wonderful response to the prompt!
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April 27, 2018 at 10:18 pm
Thanks Lillian :)….it was to show her cruel side
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April 27, 2018 at 10:44 pm
I admire your fortitude and courage in all of th
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April 27, 2018 at 11:31 pm
You did capture life’s cruel side but I like how you fight back to write your story!
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April 27, 2018 at 11:56 pm
..Till the end Lynn! Thank you 🙂
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April 28, 2018 at 4:18 am
Reblogged this on Reena Saxena.
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February 25, 2019 at 7:19 am
Love the power of your voice in this.
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February 25, 2019 at 11:48 pm
Thanks Sarah!
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