The Mission: revise these 2 haikus by Matsuo Basho

 

old pond
a frog jumps in
sound of water

© Basho (Tr. Chèvrefeuille)

 

crouching frog
a lily pad skims past
plop!

©Vivian Zems

 

autumn evening;
a crow perched
on a withered bough

© Basho (Tr. R. H. Blyth)

a bough bows
a crow caws
autumn’s sunset reigns

©Vivian Zems

 

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