A Doorbell Rings – Smell The Coffee

A Doorbell Rings

Squaring shoulders, Peter tried, “Hi! I’m your son.” No that was too direct.
“Hello sir, did you know Madeline Hoffman? “………

Finish the story in Tales in Teacups

©Vivian Zems

Friday Fiction with Rochelle

Image by Dale Rogerson

Vivian Zems

Mum, author and dentist is how I describe myself. I love creating pictures from words. Sometimes a painter, other times a weaver- words are my tool; trying to create something beautiful. When I was nine, my dad introduced me to audio books. I was hooked. With his guidance, I fell into a world where words became life simply by weaving them together. So here I am, living out my passion- reading and writing! Enjoy the ride with me 😁😁

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February 14, 2018

friday fiction #100 words, Friday Fiction with Rochelle

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Iain Kelly
February 14, 2018 at 9:48 pm

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Oh, great setup. I wonder how he will react.

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- Vivian Zems
  February 15, 2018 at 3:49 pm
  
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  Me too?😯
  
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jillyfunnell
February 15, 2018 at 10:22 am

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I really like this – intriguing opening, made me want to know what happens next.

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- Vivian Zems
  February 15, 2018 at 3:31 pm
  
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  Thanks Jilly. ..I’m glad you liked it 😊
  
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Sandra
February 15, 2018 at 12:41 pm

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How indeed. The next scene is going to be quite an eye-opener.

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- Vivian Zems
  February 15, 2018 at 1:26 pm
  
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  Quite!
  
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rochellewisoff
February 15, 2018 at 1:16 pm

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Dear Vivian,

You painted the scene beautifully. The ending line is the perfect exclamation point. Well done.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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- Vivian Zems
  February 15, 2018 at 1:25 pm
  
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  Thanks Rochelle!
  
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The Urban Spaceman
February 16, 2018 at 11:42 am

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A very powerful idea. So many worlds about to be shattered, so many people about to have their happy bubbles rudely popped. Great story!

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- Vivian Zems
  February 16, 2018 at 7:05 pm
  
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  Thank you!😊
  
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Dale
February 16, 2018 at 7:30 pm

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Here’s what I am hoping… the son was conceived BEFORE this family was created… and, as the father never knew, would not have anything to be ashamed about. How’s that for putting a positive spin on things? 🙂

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- Vivian Zems
  February 16, 2018 at 7:49 pm
  
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  I like it! (*fingers crossed *) 😊
  
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  - Dale
    February 16, 2018 at 8:00 pm
    
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    😘
    
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
February 16, 2018 at 9:33 pm

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I actually hope the same as Dale… maybe he will be received in the warmth of the home as the lost son he is.

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Dahlia
February 17, 2018 at 10:10 am

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Sometimes, one moment is all it takes. I hope there will be a sequel to this. I would love to know what happened next. 🙂

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- Vivian Zems
  February 17, 2018 at 1:38 pm
  
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  Me too! I’m trapped in 100 words!
  
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freiedenkerin
February 18, 2018 at 12:13 am

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This exciting short story will occupy my fantasy now quite a lot. 🙂

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- Vivian Zems
  February 18, 2018 at 2:05 am
  
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  🙂 Thank you!
  
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granonine
February 18, 2018 at 4:28 pm

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You’ve set the scene for any number of different scenarios. Good one.

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- Vivian Zems
  February 18, 2018 at 7:09 pm
  
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  Thank you!😊
  
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