It’s never about birds in poetry;
it is about our inadequate,
marrow-filled bones that
weigh us down
reminding us of the immediacy
of the dust.
It’s never about stars in poetry;
it is about trying on our different
masks, searching for one that
hides a cavernous soul
Its never about flowery metaphors
it is about searching for the truth
through ripping and tearing;
shredding your soul
in the process
This is my contribution to Casting Bricks. Jilly’s poem is in bold, and mine follows to completion
November 9, 2017 at 5:26 pm
very nice
Please review this poem
https://bleedingthoughtsweb.com/2017/11/09/burning-bride/
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November 9, 2017 at 8:12 pm
Thanks 😊
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November 9, 2017 at 6:00 pm
This is one of the most beautiful poems I have read!!
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November 10, 2017 at 12:52 am
Thank you! I just finished Jilly’s 🙂
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November 9, 2017 at 10:21 pm
Excellent. I really enjoy when you write in this style
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November 10, 2017 at 12:48 am
Thank you….this is more visceral and a little scary (but exciting).
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November 10, 2017 at 12:53 am
Fear can be harnessed to draw out the absolute authenticity of ourselves in a moment.
I found it beautiful
Thank you
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November 10, 2017 at 7:57 am
Bless you! Thanks 😊
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November 9, 2017 at 11:17 pm
So well done, Vivian! Nice to see that you brought metaphor into the mix, too. That last line packs a real punch! Glad you joined in with Casting Bricks
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November 10, 2017 at 12:46 am
Thanks Jilly! A pleasure 🙂
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November 10, 2017 at 1:39 am
Yes! Love those lines ripping and tearing, shredding your soul in the process, it is indeed about that.
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November 10, 2017 at 7:57 am
Indeed!
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November 10, 2017 at 1:49 am
The mask and the cavernous soul… wonderfully on target! Great take on the challenge!
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November 10, 2017 at 7:56 am
Thanks, Charley!
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November 10, 2017 at 10:40 am
You are welcome!
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November 10, 2017 at 6:42 pm
😊
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November 10, 2017 at 10:02 am
I agree with Charley about the masks and the cavernous souls. Scary stuff!
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November 10, 2017 at 11:21 am
Thanks for stopping by 🙂
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November 11, 2017 at 1:16 pm
Oh, I like the intensity in this. Writing can be a scary thing to do, and you capture that so well. Sometimes the flowery metaphors are much easier.
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November 11, 2017 at 8:44 pm
I know- it’s the ‘digging deep’ that can be a hairy experience!
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