(Steinese with a Dash of Cummings)
The window is broken
Broken is the window
Just a window but a window
To where to who to what to me to you
A window is a window is a window
When not a window
Nineteen guns not guns but guns
People scatter running here, not there, here and there, not here, but here
Take the coward’s way out
But not out yes but out
Evil visits through the window but not the window- it’s pain, no- pane ( people died you freak!)
A dead gunman is a gunman not a gunman is a coward
Ding Dong
It’s quiet
Dead and died
Wicked
(C)- Vivian Zems
Tonight at dVerse, Paul has asked us to break all grammatical rules like EE Cummings and Gertrude Stein did. So here’s my take.
October 3, 2017 at 8:52 pm
In the wake of recent events this had the feeling of those bullets coming down… the repetitions became a story in itself.
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October 4, 2017 at 12:12 pm
Thank you!
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October 3, 2017 at 8:54 pm
Well you broke the rules alright and still penned a powerful and current message.
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October 4, 2017 at 12:12 pm
Thank you!
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October 3, 2017 at 9:07 pm
Painful
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October 4, 2017 at 12:11 pm
So much😯
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October 3, 2017 at 9:18 pm
You somehow managed to make this make a timely statement! Bravo!
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October 4, 2017 at 12:11 pm
Thank you!
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October 3, 2017 at 9:20 pm
Well, the grammar here feels shattered and traumatised. Works for me.
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October 4, 2017 at 12:10 pm
Thank you! I was dizzy by the end!
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October 3, 2017 at 9:33 pm
I get this one. Bing bang—got it. Good one.
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October 3, 2017 at 11:30 pm
Thank you!
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October 4, 2017 at 8:32 am
My pleasure 🙂
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October 3, 2017 at 10:32 pm
The disorientation of your words and lines mirror that feeling as we are all reeling. Perfectly done!
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October 4, 2017 at 12:10 pm
Thank you!
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October 3, 2017 at 11:14 pm
Yes! The disjointedness of grief combined with cummings and Stein (thank God not Carroll!) makes perfect sense. Even when senses are out of tune with shock and grief. Perfect.
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October 4, 2017 at 12:09 pm
Thank you!
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October 4, 2017 at 12:17 pm
You are welcome!
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October 4, 2017 at 1:00 am
Creatively written!
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October 4, 2017 at 12:07 pm
Thank you!
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October 4, 2017 at 5:48 am
Beautiful word play as always❤.
I enjoy reading your posts and I have nominated you for the one lovely blog award😉.
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October 4, 2017 at 12:01 pm
Thank you so much. I run an award -free blog. I’m so grateful for your nomination nevertheless – it means so much to me😊
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October 4, 2017 at 12:14 pm
You are welcome and you do deserve it. X
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October 4, 2017 at 12:15 pm
😘
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October 4, 2017 at 8:28 pm
In the wake of the tragedy that took place in Las Vegas…I felt a sense of chill and eerie down my spin. This is really good writing.
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October 4, 2017 at 9:22 pm
Thank you Charlie….. it was sad and horrifying to watch.
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October 4, 2017 at 9:23 pm
I was crying when I saw the news…I can’t take anymore of this pain that is inflected upon this world. 😦
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October 4, 2017 at 9:31 pm
It’s miserable. I live in London- and we’ve had more than our fair share of horror this year. What is the world coming to?
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October 5, 2017 at 5:16 am
you have captured the feeling, the action in your words so well.
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October 5, 2017 at 6:15 am
Thank you!
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October 5, 2017 at 12:05 pm
You’ve nailed this prompt while also writing a post about the horrible Las Vegas event…and a meaningful write it is. The sight of those windows broken out in the hotel…a pane of pain indeed. Well done.
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October 5, 2017 at 12:08 pm
Thanks, Lillian! A sad story.
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